The Body: Part II

Today we completed more peer evaluation of the Nectar paper paragraphs. Here is the individual editing that students completed in class:

Draw boxes around the first 3 words of each sentence in the paragraph.
• What do you notice?
• Do you begin each sentence the same way? If so—mix it up.

Count the number of words in each sentence.
• What is your pattern?
• What potential problems do you see with the numbers?

Replace two words with more descriptive/sophisticated words.

Replace repetitive signal phrase verbs with more specific verbs.

And here is the assignment for Monday:

Write your introduction and conclusion.
Introduction:
General discussion of topic (beginning with attention-getter)
Introduction of title and author
Specific thesis statement
Conclusion:
Restatement of thesis
Summary of analysis
Return to general discussion of topic


So, you need…
A typed document with:
MLA heading
Introduction
2 body paragraphs
Conclusion
FYI: You will write the 3rd body paragraph, add a Works Cited citation for the book, and number the pages to have a complete rough draft DUE TUESDAY, 2/24.

The Body

Today we worked on revising the thesis statement and first body paragraph. Before you begin writing the 2nd body paragraph, you should revise your thesis and paragraph based on feedback you received today from your peers. Also, you are to make the following specific revisions to your 1st body paragraph:

1.Combine 2 of the paragraph’s sentences.
2.Rework any sentence beginning with there.
3.Replace one word with a more sophisticated, descriptive word.

Then, write your 2nd body paragraph.

So, here's the homework for tomorrow:

REVISE your thesis and first body paragraph.
Add a second body paragraph.
Include a transition between the first and second body paragraphs.
Print it all. Include: an MLA heading, thesis statement, and both body paragraphs.

Nectar: The Paper

After the exam today, we began talking about how to use the multi-flow map (homework for today) to create a thesis statement for the paper. I worked through my own example of examining fear in the text. For tomorrow, your job is to create a thesis statement and write your first body paragraph. This MUST BE TYPED.

Your TYPED paper should have:

• an MLA heading
• your thesis statement
• a complete body paragraph including 2 PIEs.

If your printer is not working, please post your thesis and paragraph to your blog; then, get to school early so you can paste your work onto a word document and print in the media center.

Nectar: The Exam

Today we were able to finish our flow maps of Nectar's plot. We discussed the Nectar essay and required prewriting.

Tomorrow is the Nectar exam. Part of the exam tests comprehension of the book; part of the exam tests the vocabulary that we've been reviewing. Please study the vocabulary from the list in your notebook.

Homework for tomorrow is to complete the multi-flow map that is required to begin writing the essay. We will working on writing the essay over the next few days.

**The essay prompt can be found on Edline.

The End

This weekend you will read the rest of Nectar in a Sieve. You also must answer the 6 questions on the blue sheet about the Coleridge poem.

We took a quiz in class. Then, we worked on "I Have, Who Has?" We need some serious work on that--Roehl's and Tholen's classes are really making us look bad (I think they're cheating). We also showcased the blogs of a couple students.

Enjoy the end of the book!

OH, and don't forget to read/blog. The theme for this post is religion/spirituality/belief/non-belief. Here's an article that works for the assigned theme--and it's about Hinduism, India, and the U.S.

Back to the Village...

Today we discussed the book (after we took a quiz). When we left them at the end of last night's reading, Ruku and Nathan were headed back to their village. Read pp. 165-176 tonight to find out what happens to them...

Also, 3rd hour students should be looking for 4 examples of your theme concept to put in your blue charts. I expect to see completed charts tomorrow.

Analyzing Nectar

Today we reviewed last night's reading and worked on some analysis questions.

Homework: Read pp. 150-164...and don't forget to blog.

Tonight's blog is supposed to discuss gender roles/gender issues. Certainly any text you are currently reading has some aspect of gender to discuss. But, if you want an article to read, check out this article about the treatment of women in immigration detention centers.