The Body

Today we worked on revising the thesis statement and first body paragraph. Before you begin writing the 2nd body paragraph, you should revise your thesis and paragraph based on feedback you received today from your peers. Also, you are to make the following specific revisions to your 1st body paragraph:

1.Combine 2 of the paragraph’s sentences.
2.Rework any sentence beginning with there.
3.Replace one word with a more sophisticated, descriptive word.

Then, write your 2nd body paragraph.

So, here's the homework for tomorrow:

REVISE your thesis and first body paragraph.
Add a second body paragraph.
Include a transition between the first and second body paragraphs.
Print it all. Include: an MLA heading, thesis statement, and both body paragraphs.